Writers are often unsure of how to format thoughts in their writing.
Thoughts are best put in italic and do not include quotes. For example:
I hope this description makes sense to you.
An attribute tag, such as “he thought” is not used, since the person doing the thinking should be obvious from the context. You know this is my thought since I am the author.
However, I have seen some publishers use different approaches, such as putting thoughts in quotes, including the attribute tag, or even skipping the italics—one publisher did all three, rending it indistinguishable from spoken dialogue, except for the tag “thought” rather than “said.” I don’t appreciate these alternate presentations of thoughts.
Now, here’s a question for you. I’m working on a story concept where two characters communicate telepathically, and I wonder how I should format it. For example:
Where have you been? Shelly was angry and relieved at the same time.
You told me to go away, so I did. Terry’s sad aura filled the space between them.
It was six months ago. Only now did Shelly comprehend the impact of her careless words. I’ve missed you…so very much.
I’ve always been nearby, just waiting for you to call me back. Terry smiled, the first visible sign that he missed her, too.
Peter Lyle DeHaan, PhD, is an author, blogger, and publisher with over 30 years of writing and publishing experience. Check out his book The Successful Author for insider tips and insights.